Develop my thesis
My preliminary thesis is: Greta Gerwig’s Barbie and Little Women change traditional
female narratives by delivering an in-depth analysis to explore Greta Gerwig’s unique
filmmaking style and how it influences broader conversations about the impact of women
directors on cinema and the significance of gender in our society, leading to a deeper
understanding of gender, identity, and power within modern society that is, therefore,
restructuring the culture of the film industry by highlighting the voices and perspectives of
female directors
Comment:
This is too vaguely formulated; you could substitute in any director or women-directed films and it would still make sense. What’s needed is a specific, detailed claim about what makes Gerwig’s style unique, and what these films state about gender, identity and power. The syntax in the first sentence needs work; it’s you, not the films, doing “in-dept analysis”. Also remember the formatting rule for film titles.
